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I'm in year ten and had to write an essay on where I would most like to live in the world for homework, can you please tell me what you think? Constructive criticism only please, thanks! If I had the choice to live anywhere across the globe, I would always choose the one place I know best... England! A boring, unimaginative, typical answer? Nah, just the one place I feel safest, and the place I think of, as home! One of the reasons I feel so safe here in England is because it very seldom has freak weather, so there is much less risk of natural disasters, such as hurricanes, earthquakes, and tornadoes unlike China, Asia and America. Here, we have the rights of free speech, to say what we think and we are able to voice our opinions; this allows us to be the people we want to be. Journalists have the right of free press, they are able to write what they like, unlike so many other countries, this enables us to report, to update and keep everyone informed with everything that’s going on. We all have human rights that keep us safe and protect us. We have a democracy, where everyone can vote for what who they want to be in power; which means nothing disastrous can occur. Many places in the USA and Spain have curfews, which means the police refrain you from being outside of your property after a certain time, the curfews depends on your age, your gender, or if there is a particularly high crime rate in that area. The UK does not have a curfew, but we do have ASBO’s, this can help innocent people get along with what they need to do, but keep offenders from re-offending. In England, it is against the law to discriminate someone because of their sex, for example, you are forbidden not give a person a job because of their gender, because we understand that no sex is superior to the other, both are equals and should be given an equal chance. Any person who is earning more than five thousand pounds a year has to pay tax. One of the services paid for by tax is the NHS, the NHS give us the financial support, and the access to doctors, nurses and the correct equipment, to receive the medical attention we require. From complicated medical procedures, to simply removing a tooth. Emergency services are also there on demand whenever you are in danger; these are here to help keep you safe. Technology, machinery and equipment are all constantly being updated and improved here in England, for instance; computers, to laptops, iPods, to smart phones, but also with equipment that can save our lives, like health screening, MRI scans, and even x-rays. These help find diseases or illnesses so we can treat them before they get too advanced to get rid of. This is another reason that makes me thankful to live in England, because I know if I have a problem I can be helped, and that we have the technology and also the funding (from the NHS) to save our lives. We are also more advanced than some other countries in the fact that we have quick and easy access to clean water, and everyone, from any background, is being given the chance to go to school, and no matter how much we all complain about it, we all know we want and need an education! As children and adults living in the UK, we are able to grow up with everything we need, a good education, councillors, benefits, the NHS, emergency services, social services, charities – such as ChildLine, or Barnardos, we also have the chance to claim benefits if needed, which helps free us from poverty. All these things can help us to grow up to be whoever we want to be, and to be given the chance and opportunity to do what we want to do.
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There are a lot of run-on sentences and it is too informal. Nah isn't a word. I do not think that all of your information is accurate.
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There are many grammatical errors and spelling errors. Some of your information is inaccurate.
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